Wow. Ingenius but we've always known that about you.
On one hand this is angsty, bittersweet. On the other it parellels reality nicely. How many of us go out into the world everyday to do our duty, our jobs and live in this fantasy land deep within our minds to stay sane?
That was really, truly fantastic. You made me sad (in a good way), and that's not an easy thing to do. And the dairy typo made me laugh. (Ctrl+F -> 3/5 down the page: "forgotten dairies".) ^_^
"...all those told secrets did was to provoke more laughter so he kept right on telling the truth, out in the open, where no one ever believed him."
Ain't that the truth?
Correct me if I'm wrong (hell, I haven't been stalking you for that long), but there seems to be an awful lot of you in Him.
Just...much, much adoration.
(And why do you have so many dishes? Because you need a minion to wash them for you/stack the dishwasher. ~_^)
Well, I suppose forgotten dairies would make for a rather nasty fridge concoction over time. ^_~ Thank you for catching that one.
As for parallels between myself and the character… well, I shall attempt not to make any jokes about being Deus ex Machina because I suspect they’d be horribly unfunny in the aftermath of that last Matrix film. And now you know of my weakness for prawn cocktail sandwiches… ah, well…
I’m glad you liked it.
(I’m in two minds about the minion issue because sometimes they do get horribly underfoot. What I need is automated ones that I can turn off when appropriate. Yes, human beings should have an off switch, I think. ^_~)
wow. Just wow. I won't gush about you being brilliant, because relating an alternate reality isn't necessarily a case of brilliance. But I am impressed by the skill with which you relate it, the vibrancy of the words and imagery, the feeling of unarguable, flippant Truth behind it all.
The best science fiction is like this -- it makes you susped disbelief. Creates a world where you feel the truth of what you're reading.
I can only hope The Node comes off half so well in the end.
I think it’s sometimes easier to suspend disbelief if the reality being written about is in certain ways quite close to the current one you’re sitting in. Or at least, if there are things that can be used as parallels, not that they necessarily aren’t but... well...
Wow... Tav may not gush about you being brilliant, but maybe I should. ~_^
This is really awesome. So vivid, such a 3d character for all that he doesn't even get named (no, he doesn't need a name for this).
A few typos, perhaps: "Get me a new sectary" - sectary --> secretary? "He always kept his colleges laughing." - colleges --> colleagues?
I really like how you take the concept of "what if we're just the dreams of someone/something else?" and make it fresh and new and thought-provoking all over again. Very well done.
(and I also hate when the dirty dishes reach a certain critical mass and start reproducing on their own...)
Thank you and thank you again for catching the typos. I’m afraid that editing process somehow got rather rushed.
I think you’re right that the character doesn’t need naming for all that it’s his story because what would you call a machine anyway? Primary Administration System or something similar. His name doesn’t matter any more than whether or not either side is the dream of the other. We work within the realities we inhabit for any length of time. We deal with ‘as is’. ^_~
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Date: 2005-05-08 04:39 am (UTC)On one hand this is angsty, bittersweet. On the other it parellels reality nicely. How many of us go out into the world everyday to do our duty, our jobs and live in this fantasy land deep within our minds to stay sane?
I liked this.
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Date: 2005-05-09 12:58 pm (UTC)There’s an Oscar Wilde quote that sums it up nicely as:
"One's real life is often the life that one does not lead."
Because I suppose real life would get boring if that was all you had. ^_~
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Date: 2005-05-08 07:03 am (UTC)"...all those told secrets did was to provoke more laughter so he kept right on telling the truth, out in the open, where no one ever believed him."
Ain't that the truth?
Correct me if I'm wrong (hell, I haven't been stalking you for that long), but there seems to be an awful lot of you in Him.
Just...much, much adoration.
(And why do you have so many dishes? Because you need a minion to wash them for you/stack the dishwasher. ~_^)
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Date: 2005-05-09 01:06 pm (UTC)Thank you for catching that one.
As for parallels between myself and the character… well, I shall attempt not to make any jokes about being Deus ex Machina because I suspect they’d be horribly unfunny in the aftermath of that last Matrix film. And now you know of my weakness for prawn cocktail sandwiches… ah, well…
I’m glad you liked it.
(I’m in two minds about the minion issue because sometimes they do get horribly underfoot. What I need is automated ones that I can turn off when appropriate. Yes, human beings should have an off switch, I think. ^_~)
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Date: 2005-05-08 08:13 am (UTC)The best science fiction is like this -- it makes you susped disbelief. Creates a world where you feel the truth of what you're reading.
I can only hope The Node comes off half so well in the end.
Thanks for sharing. ^_^
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Date: 2005-05-09 01:14 pm (UTC)I think it’s sometimes easier to suspend disbelief if the reality being written about is in certain ways quite close to the current one you’re sitting in. Or at least, if there are things that can be used as parallels, not that they necessarily aren’t but... well...
I’m glad you liked it. ^_^
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Date: 2005-05-08 10:04 am (UTC)This is really awesome. So vivid, such a 3d character for all that he doesn't even get named (no, he doesn't need a name for this).
A few typos, perhaps:
"Get me a new sectary" - sectary --> secretary?
"He always kept his colleges laughing." - colleges --> colleagues?
I really like how you take the concept of "what if we're just the dreams of someone/something else?" and make it fresh and new and thought-provoking all over again. Very well done.
(and I also hate when the dirty dishes reach a certain critical mass and start reproducing on their own...)
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Date: 2005-05-09 01:20 pm (UTC)I think you’re right that the character doesn’t need naming for all that it’s his story because what would you call a machine anyway? Primary Administration System or something similar.
His name doesn’t matter any more than whether or not either side is the dream of the other. We work within the realities we inhabit for any length of time. We deal with ‘as is’. ^_~